1. It is not appropriate for teachers and that she should have used the right text to send to a teacher.
2. That you can understand it very clearly and you can see what they are trying to say.
3. That the should have included paragraphs and checked there spelling.
4. That they should have used one o on so, not like this sooooooo.
5. That the should have included paragraphs and checked there spelling.
6. She should have used the full word great not like this gr8.
7. That is dose not say who it if from and who it is to and it is very short and they should have written more.
8. That it is very confident and that it is very good and that it is very formal and good for a teacher
This is my avatar it somewhat looks like me
Rebecca time to WAKE UP,(Alarm clock) what the time? Says Rebecca,(Alarm clock) 6:30am, OMG I AM LATE FOR SCHOOL, Rebecca quickly puts on her school uniform and runs downstairs says bye to mum and dad while her toast is toasting, however she trips over her bag because she is rushing after she starts crying REBECCA ARE YOU OK, says mum, NO says Rebecca, Therefore mum is running down the hallway even though she is pregnant she was worried, in that case, it gave her pain, Mum helped me get up I was fine after that, I got m toast and left the house on the way to school I had to catch the bus I did not like the bus because some boys bully me and the fact that mums pregnant it did not help because I was worried when I got home dad said that mum is not very well she has gone to the hospital said dad, At that point, I was worried dad said we have to go to the hospital now, in my head I was thinking so meaningful things I was thinking is mum alright is the baby ok is she going to have the baby?.
The thing that I am excited about posting about me and people getting to know me better and to look at peoples learning and add on to there ideas and editing my blog and adding new things to it